ACES Pre-writing Boxes
Hook (1st Sentence to grab reader’s attention):
Should the FBI be able to hack into Iphones? https://newsela.com/articles/applefbi-procon/id/16223/
Last Sentence of 1st Paragraph Thesis Statement (6 to 10 words) -
The FBI should be able to hack into some Iphones.
1st Sentence of 2nd Paragraph: Topic Sentence (What the paragraph is going to be about)
The FBI wants Apple to help them by hacking into their brand of Iphones.
Textual Evidence Evidence based on Topic in 2nd paragraph (From Article or Research that supports your thesis)
According to PRO: Apple's refusal to cooperate with the FBI was the right thing to do “The FBI wanted Apple to write new software to unlock Syed Farook's iPhone. Last December, Farook and his wife killed 14 people in a mass shooting in San Bernardino. Because of the privacy features of the iPhone, the FBI could not search Farook's phone for information about the attack without Apple's help.”
2nd Paragraph Elaboration (You're Supporting detail of the textual evidence)
Apple should have helped the FBI hack into Syed Farook’s iPhone. If Apple helped the FBI hack into Farooks phone the FBI could have caught him and his wife quicker than they did. With the use of Apple helping hack into IPhones we not only could have caught farook faster, but also more criminals. With the advantage of being able to hack into IPhone we could find out more about where killers, rapists, drug dealers, etc. are, and be able to take these people off the streets. This advantage could save many many lives.
1st Sentence of 3rd Paragraph: Topic Sentence
Apple is protecting people's privacy rights, and the value of their brand.
Textual Evidence: Evidence based on Topic in 2nd paragraph (From Article or Research that supports your thesis)
According to Real Issue Is A Backdoor Attack On Our Rights “Americans have the right to possess information without having to share it with the government. And Apple has the right to provide products that help Americans protect this right.” “I have seen arguments that Apple refused to unlock the phone for business reasons, to protect the value of its brand.”
3 Paragraph Elaboration (Your Supporting details of the textual evidence) 4 to 5 sentences
Apple is stating that there just protecting the people's rights, that is stated in the 12 Amendment. Would people rather have this right protected and the FBI possibly not be able to hack into IPhones and let criminals get away, or would they want Apple to help the FBI and keep your children safe and your family in a more safer community where you don't have to worry about what the criminal is going to do next. If Apple really wanted to help the people they should have helped the FBI get Farook off the street. Apple is also stating that they want to keep the value of their brand. If anything more parents would want to buy Apple phones for their kids, so that if anything ever did happen to them Apple and the FBI could hack into his/her or the criminals phone and possibly find out where or what happened to them.
1st Sentence of 4th Paragraph: Topic Sentence
The FBI didn't want Apple to hack into any phone because they wanted to, they were wanting to save the lives of some American.
4th Paragraph: Textual Evidence (From Article)
According to Real Issue Is A Backdoor Attack On Our Rights “This case was about more than the threat of a backdoor way to access our phones, it was about the real danger we face from a backdoor attack on our rights.”
4th Paragraph Elaboration (Your Supporting details of the textual evidence) 4 to 5 sentences
The FBI didn't want Apple to hack into just any phone, for their benefit. The FBI had a probable cause and wanted to help keep the people safe and get Farook and his wife off the street before they hurt another person. Apple thought they were protecting people's rights that are stated in the 12 amendment, but the FBI was trying to save innocent people's lives. Since Apple wouldn't help the FBI, the FBI had to figure out how to hack into phones themselves. What if the FBI couldn't figure it out, more innocent lives could have been killed.
Summarize Paragraph - Start with my thesis statement then rephrase my topic sentences to build this paragraph
The FBI should be able to hack into some Iphones. The FBI wants to work with Apple to hack into IPhones. Apple won't help the FBI, because they state there protecting the people's rights and the value of their brand. The FBI don't want to hack into just any phone, they wanted to hack into a criminals phone to save some people's lives.